Wednesday, April 22, 2009

So You've Killed Yourself

pain all gone
you are still
I am alone

still all alone
you are gone
I am pain

5 comments:

  1. You did a great job with the transition. The depth of the subject stays in spite of the apparent simplicity

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  2. i agree simple yet deep....very nice

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  3. A lot of power in a few words--I especially like the way you ended the poem.

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